Remediation- Two Ideas

For my remediation, I’m leaning towards an adaptation or a complement style. My repurposed piece is grounded in the theme of silence and is organized as a series of vignettes. The vignettes follow a woman at different moments in her life as she experiences silence in various capacities (5 sections). I also offer another perspective at the end of each section from one of the other characters in the respective section.

This piece is missing silence. I mean, it is all words. So that is a big hole. And I think that, to avoid verbalizing this idea of silence again, I’m going to create a visual piece. Additionally, I am trying to encompass many forms of silence, and because different people experience totally different varieties of silence, I am failing by following only one individual. Or, partially succeeding. Can’t decide if the glass is half full or half empty today…

For an adaptation, I might create a video of people talking/interacting without sound. This would allow the viewer to focus on body language during these interactions. I would show a variety of situations with a variety of individuals. This minimizes the hole caused by my not being able to encompass many forms of silence through my vignettes. And this might be more successful if the individuals in the video are not talking at all…

A possible complement: a dance. Although I would only have one individual dancing, the individual is not meant to represent one entity. Instead, the dance is meant to draw attention to fluidity and movement. This would remove the “failure to encompass many forms of silence” hole. I would include music in this case- the dance is meant to represent the fluidity of silence, so the presence of sound should not affect the overall  message. The problem with this is that I’d need to find a dancer or perform a dance myself (not sure how that would go…). I’m going to try to think of other possible complements in the meantime!

Writing 220 Remediation Idea: Emily Fishman

Hey y’all! I’ve been thinking about what I want to do for my remediation and I think there’s any idea with which I’m interested.

My repurposed piece is a mock-stylebook based on a piece I wrote for The Michigan Daily about my lack of creativity and my need for structure and a different way of thinking about the creative process. The stylebook is pretty referential and serves as a guide for how to write about not being able to write (as confusing as that is).

My current idea for my remediation piece is to take the stylebook that I have created and apply it to a fictional magazine or other publication. The piece would be a combination of prose and design elements: ideally, I would create two or so pages of the document and then “edit” them according to the stylebook repurposing piece. The “original” piece would have flaws and errors that are emblematic of my creative anxiety, and the “edited” version would indicate the superior skill set and perspective that I have after discovering my need for structure. This feels like a complement to the original, as the fictionalized publication would not be meant to stand on its own without the original stylebook. I’m excited to see where this piece takes me!


Writing 220: Remediation Ideas – Max Rysztak

In thinking about my remediation for my essay on IDF militaristic development and potential US similarities, a couple of options stand out.

Firstly, I am most excited by translating my essay into a speech. I’ve always wanted to be a political/policy speechwriter and I think a translation would be a great use of this essay. There is a lot of potential for this to be a speech as it is already academic, well supported, and relevant. The biggest challenge in this idea, however, is getting the right tone as the setting for the speech would be undefined.

For the complement section, I think it would be interesting to dive deeper into one of the policial actors I analyze in my original piece. Since I look at 4 Haganah (and future IDF) leaders, I could create a complement piece in hopes of diving deeper into one of the leaders – providing a more immersive reading background.

I am less excited about the adaptation/inspiration areas of a potential remediation simply due to the topic of my original essay. A potential adaptation piece could be one of adapting an original essay into an informational video (widely available and easy to understand). This could serve as educating the masses by using visuals to help explain the complex geographic conflict. In terms of inspiration, I think that a potential fiction piece, maybe on an IDF soldier being inspired by the leadership of one of the military leaders has potential – in that the point of view of the soldier could be more deeply understood.


I am definitely a little confused about which route I am going to choose for my remediation project, but here are a few ideas.

1. A podcast– however, I would have someone else recite it because my natural voice makes me sound like a person who has been smoking for fifty years.

2. A blog– I would track food trucks and see what other people experienced by eating from them.

3. A ted talk– they’re my favorite and I think my topic of social media and intertwining with food trucks can show a lot

So. Much. Formatting.

Remediation: I finally found someone who is willing to help me with Photoshop! Because I’m preoccupied with quality, I hope this assistance will help me have more confidence in my work.

These Photoshop endeavors have truly been a challenge, but I’m glad this class has pushed me to grapple with new software. Although its arguable that every class at U-M can give you skills you can put on your resume, this is the first time the takeaway has been concrete and objective.

I’m shocked by the amount of time I spend formatting EVERYTHING on the website I am creating. So much of the content is shaped by the design and vice versa. I’ve been struggling with the more subjective parts of my project, where I get to be choosy. It is hard for me to feel like I’m making the right choices at all times. I’m also an inherently indecisive person, so that doesn’t help. 

I didn’t expect that I’d put so much thought into controlling and shaping the way my readers navigate my site and encounter information. Design used to seem enjoyable, but now it feels tedious and almost stressful. There’s almost too much control. Overall I’d say I’m focused on making sure everything is as effective as it can possibly be. Making sure there isn’t too much of this or too little of that, or that links are obvious and that the information they contain is relevant enough and worth my viewer’s time. Etc. I’m also focused on making sure I’m doing enough work, not only for this project to be considered legitimate, but also in terms of achieving my purpose.

me when I found a generous soul to help me with photoshop
me when I found a generous soul to help me with photoshop

Why I Write: I knew going into this class that this assignment would be one of the hardest assignments I would complete in college. I could write 100 Why I Write papers, and all would be valid, yet different descriptions of how and why I write.

I knew I wanted to tell stories and use some figurative language, or at least some informal language. But I struggled not telling ALL the stories. I also wanted this paper to be a maximum 3 pages, and that was a struggle.

I wish I could write two papers: why I write, in relation to the work I’m doing in this class, and then another one that is more emotional, and abstract, and filled with sentence fragments. It’s hard to balance the personal and academic (or maybe I should say requirements). But I still got to do some figurative work, and I’m grateful for that. I also think it reminded me of why I write, which was inspirational. Drafting certain parts of this piece didn’t feel like school. It felt like pastime. I love when that happens, and I’m grateful for that too.

I feel like I’ll never be happy with this piece because it could go in SO many directions. I would have to write every possible draft, then choose the one I think is most fitting at this point in my life, to be happy with the work I do for this assignment.

“What’s On Your Mind?”

As annoyed as I get by that question when I see it on my Newsfeed, it’s been a reminder this week in terms of the work I’m doing for this class. In particular, I just can’t get remediation project out of my head. I think it’s because a lot of the people I’ve been photographing have such interesting opinions on higher education and why or why not people should go to college that it makes me wonder a lot about my own personal decisions to attend school. Granted, I don’t think it’s a mistake that I decided to attend U of M, but I do think it’s fascinating that so many of my friends are having such dissimilar experiences in comparison. For example, one of my friends went to college for a year before dropping out and pursuing a music career. She posts videos on YouTube and plays at various venues around Chicago. When I took her photograph, she kept talking about risk. She knows the path she’s chosen is a risk, but she is taking it anyways.

Despite these questions reeling in my head, I have really been enjoying photographing people. There’s definitely been an itch to photograph that I haven’t quite been able to scratch thus far in college, so I’m glad this class–and this project in particular–has given me the opportunity to do so. I’ve loved playing around with angles and lighting to get the perfect shot. I’ve always noticed that some of my friends have become more open to being photographed, which is pretty fun to see! It’s definitely going to be a rude awakening when I have to take classes without so much creative freedom. I think I’ve gotten so used to making my own decisions that I’m interested to see what it will be like not to have this creative outlet next semester.

photo shoot

As always, with so much creativity comes numerous challenges. I’m struggling to continue taking photos of people with different experiences. I’ve noticed that the majority of the people I’ve photographed are my friends, and they have relatively similar points of view on stress and success that I do. This week, I’ll be pushing myself to ask people I don’t know if I can speak with them and potentially photograph them, just in the hopes of getting more diverse answers and experiences. This process has made me start to appreciate even more the Humans of New York account as well as other blogs interviewing and engaging with people. It’s hard work! Not only does the other person have to be in the mood to talk with you, but you have to be in the mood to listen. That’s one skill that I’ve definitely gotten better at since beginning my remediation. I can listen to people for hours on end now, with no loss of enthusiasm. If I gain nothing else from this project, that will be the most meaningful skill, I’m sure.

There’s also this aspect of not wanting to say goodbye to my remediation. This is definitely going to be a piece of work I continuously revisit and tweak because, like people, their stories will be ever changing. I’m looking forward to looking at my remediation year after year at the minimum to see how my friends opinions have changed or stayed the same. It’s a little bit of history I’m creating, which is exciting for me and I think for them as well.

In college, making cartoons

When I was in high school, I never would have thought that I would be making cartoons in college for a project. It seemed so simplistic and silly, especially since I wanted to become a doctor. Well, here I am now, and there is only one question racing through my brain:

Who knew making a cartoon would be so difficult?

That’s right, for my remediation project, I have decided to make a cartoon of the events that transpired in my memoir. Initially, this sounds like it should be lots of fun; unless, of course, you have zero artistic talent like me. Then it becomes even more fun as you try to scour the internet of cartoon creating websites that are free. Thankfully, Bitstrips comics allows me to create comics for free, so I have been investing a lot of time and energy with this website over the last few days. While Bistrips does make the task a bit more cumbersome (especially since the panel size is minuscule), it does save me the trouble of having to physically draw out the comic, ultimately making it worth the little inconveniences.

regret nothing

With regards to my mock up storyboard, there is not much that I feel needs to be explained for that. All my mock up storyboard details is the scenes I intend to cartoonize (I feel like that should be a word) from my memoir, the specific moments that I want to emphasize through the visual medium of cartoons. I will say that while I plan to cartoonize (there’s that word again) most, if not all, of my memoir, the storyboard does help me decide what moments I want to linger on and draw out in greater detail.

The Cusp of Remediation

I must admit that it is pretty hectic having yet another huge project begin right after the culmination of another, but I guess the show must go on!

My repurposing project ended with a bang. It was very time consuming but ultimately I was very pleased with how it turned out. I have a link to the video here for those who are curious! Deciding on a video for the repurposing project makes it a little harder to decide on a medium for the remediation project, but I think I have nailed down my platform. Still wanting to incorporating writing with visuals, I toyed with the idea of doing a powerpoint before finally deciding on doing a graphic layout in the form of a blog.

As a longtime user of tumblr, I always admired the aesthetic of theme blogs. Theme blogs, which are custom made templates designed for other uses to pick and chose, have this welcoming atmosphere and friendly tone, the kind of tone I would love to have when presenting my information on film and neorealism. Many theme blogs are arranged in an objective style, catered to the viewer, so they can chose where to look and where to focus their attention on. They also feature various techniques such as hover text and post blurring that is pleasing to the eye. Here is one example of a theme blog I found particularly appealing.

From one visual representation form to another, but still centering around a mode of writing, I hope my original neorealism message will keep its appeal as it transforms one again.

Remediation Project

So my first model for my remediation project is a documentary surrounding the stigma within Ross and specifically the recruiting process within Ross. I plan on making the documentary around 3 minutes in order to maintain attention from my targeted audience, which is business students across the country, their educators, and their future employers. I think for this to be received by that audience it has to be extremely high-quality, professional, and relatively short. I would interview the same students from my article plus a few more, including educators and diverse students, with questions regarding their view on gender biases and other biases within Ross and their personal experiences within recruiting. The setting for the interviews would be a mix of in-class setting and interview-style setting.

However, my second model is something a bit less professional that caters to the social media world. It would be a 90 second snap story-style intended for business students primarily but in the hope that it would be shared enough that it would reach a broader audience. I would probably interview only students for this video and have the questions asked in a more student life/fun setting, if that makes sense.

For a long time my friends and I have joked about a video interviewing Ross students asking “What does business casual mean to you?” so I think a title along those lines would help draw in people on a less serious level to deliver a serious message.

I think I am leaning toward the first model because it aligns with my repurposed article in the Wall Street Journal and caters to this audience more directly. However, I’d love to hear thoughts on both models from my peers.

Remediation Ruminations

I’m not sure how I’ll remediate my current project, but I’ve narrowed down my options to just two. My first choice is to create a video, or highlight reel, of some split-second decisions in sports. I could incorporate some of the wording from my repurposing project into slides for the video and start with Chris Webber calling the timeout, much like how I started my repurposing project.

Creating a video would be a great challenge for me because I’ve never done so before. Over the summer, I interned in the corporate communications department of Blue Cross Blue Shield, so I was able to watch some co-workers create videos. I did NOT realize how complex creating a three-minute video could be. After seeing others create videos, I got the itch to create one as well. I think it would be fun to learn how to use a video editing application and I can see how it could come in handy.

Challenge Accepted

On that note, I’m not sure if I’ll be able to create a video due to copyright laws and what not, but I’ll definitely try. For my model, I’m considering to work off of ESPN Top-10 style. The only reason I don’t like this model is because it doesn’t incorporate any language. That was a problem I ran into quite often when searching for models. I will continue to search.

My second idea is create a podcast. I like to practice speaking because if I pursue the career I’m planning on, presentation skills are highly important. I’ve also never created a podcast. I think I could create a three-part series, with each podcast focusing on a specific example of a decision in sports. I would talk through what I thought happened and incorporate psychological perspectives. I like this idea because I can talk through my ideas, but I still like the idea of a video because it’s so visual.

There are a quite a few podcasts I could model  my project off, like basically any of these top-ranking sports podcasts. I don’t want to model my podcast off a specific podcast because each podcast has its own style. Some are funny, some are serious, and I’m not sure what I want just yet.

Justin Bieber shrug